In Antiuga, people speak of slavery as if it had been a pageant full of large ships sailing on blue water, the large ships filled up with human cargo--their ancestors; they got off, they were forced to work under conditions that were cruel and inhuman, they were beaten, they were murdered, they were sold, their children were taken from them and these separations lasted forever, there were many other bad things, and then suddenly the whole thing came to an end in something called emancipation. Then they speak of emancipation itself as if it happened just the other day, not over one hundred and fifty years ago. The word "emancipation" is used so frequently, it is as if it, emancipation, were a contemporary occurrence, something everybody is familiar with. And perhaps there is something in that, for an institution that is often celebrated in Antigua is the Hotel Training School, a school that teaches Antiguans how to be good servants, how to be a good nobody, which is what a servant is.
At Brien McMahon, administrators see physical education as a fundamental key to physical fitness, the physical education responsible for fit students--these students; they were assigned gym, they had to complete four gym credits to graduate, they were bored, they were too athletic, they were wasting their time, they lost the ability to take other precious classes they could have had time for, there were so many other interesting classes, and if only the athletes could forget about taking gym. Athletes have no need for physical education, for they already condition on a normal basis for their sport. A "Green Beret" is a form of football conditioning, that, when fully endured, yields 2200 yards of sprinting, a deafening amount. And that would, without a doubt, yield more exercise than what a P.E. class would yield, therefore taking the class' place, proving it more inadequate for athletes.
Hey Drew, I really liked your ability to match your paragraph with Kincaid's in terms of structure; they were very similar. I also loved your topic, something I completely agree with. Some of the phrasing could have been better, but the lack of free structure can greatly affect the way you phrase sentences. All in all, job well done!
ReplyDeleteI think that this was a good topic to chose because I had no idea that this would bother athletes. I also think you did a good job trying to keep up with Kincaid's writing style. It is very hard to write exactly what you want to say when you're being restricted but I think you did a good job with most of your phrasing.
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