Though many would like to argue
that outsourcing negatively affects its host country through loss of jobs and a
larger wealth gap, Indian architect Apurva Bose reveals a few clues as to why
it may not be that bad after all. Making many strong claims, one of the first
Bose is makes is that “the outsourcing bandwagon is experiencing unprecedented growth”
and that will inevitably force some sort of economic change. This change after
all may not be a bad thing, for she also mentions that outsourcing develops
strong relationships between companies and between countries and therefore
enable cultural exchange. This exchange, entirely due to technological
advancement in communication, can happen easily and swiftly as if the two
parties were ten minutes down the road from each other. The last major claim Bose reveals to us is
that from outsourcing comes a sense of inter-economic dependency between the
two parties. By monopolizing work forces in certain populations outsourcing can
unfortunately eradicate any sense of individuality within that field. However,
for anyone to understand her claims one must realize the true reason as to why
countries like China, Mexico, and India are so attractive to western companies—they
provide means of which to hire a cheap workforce and thereby save money for the
company.
Apurva Bose’s voice throughout her
editorial functioned as a key rhetorical device. Working with her incredibly
simple diction, it was able to produce an article appealing to the reader. Though
many recognize “outsourcing” as a trigger word, Bose approaches the issue in a
very practical manner. She comes across very neutral and extremely sincere, not
at all authoritative. By using simple word-choice and an adequate grammatical structure, Bose enabled herself
to become relatable to the reader which could have made a huge difference
pertaining to the fact that this editorial was released in London,
England. For example, her juxtaposition
of argumentative paragraphs allows the reader to flow from one reason to
another and understand how they are connected. Lastly, she personifies
outsourcing as something that “seeks the blessings of an unswerving
relationship and an understanding between the two parties involved.”
Drew, a solid start. Maybe tweak your second sentence to be more thesis like: "Bose uses her straightfoward tone to give us clues that outsourcing may not be so bad afterall"--or something of that nature.
ReplyDeleteYour first paragraph discussing the claims is really solid and thoughtful. The second paragraph gets weaker; when you discuss the rhetorical devices, it's better to connect them to the claims. Otherwise, you're speaking in really vague terms and it's hard to prove and hard to follow. If you could integrate paragraphs 1 and 2 (here's her first claim and here's how her diction made me believe it) then you'd be in great shape.